I worked on this in class yesterday. I have to admit, I was not in the mood to paint, finding plenty of reasons to sit and look and just sit and zone out! So I'm not happy with this. Sandy recommended one more thing and I'm going to try that to see if it helps it BUT either way I'm going to paint this again differently - no glazing but just go in with mixtures of paint on the paper while it's wet and try to get the darks and keep the whites that way. We'll see. Since the Twinrocker soaks up the paint and water, I'll go back to either Arches or Fabriano for the second version.
What do you think about this version? What does it need to make it work? I think the reds are overworked - I got too opaque with the paints and I need to sort my paints and make sure I'm keeping the transparent look to them, not laying them in so thickly at times. I bought a dark, rich blood-red yesterday, too, which might give me a boost with getting that color right. And I need to let more colors blend - right now the purples look too blah.